What I have learned from my individual essay.

Hybrid rice

This Tuesday I got my essay paper back and I read the feedback that Miss Kavi wrote for me. I think I learned a lot from this. My essay is about how effective hybrid rice achieves sustainability.

The first paragraph I gave a brief introduction about how important it is for us to achieve food security and maintain sustaniable enviornment. In the following paragraph I explained what is hybrid rice. Then I justified how it is effective for sustainable enviornment by using system approach.

As Miss Kavi mentioned it would be better for me to justified using system approach as a whole rather than I state the input is "seed" and the output is "rice". Further I think adding a diagram will make my essay much more clear for readers to understand. Another thing that Miss Kavi pointed out is that I should avoid use rhetorical qustion in my essay. I will not do this again.

I learned a lot from the essay. I learned how to get useful information. Because hybrid rice is invented in China therefore more information could be found in Chinese and I have to translate that into English. It's quite challenging but also quite fun. I also learned the basic skills of writing a essay. Expressing much but in few words is important so we should make our language clear and succinct.

16 Yuzhi